Introduction and Methods
Introduction Automobiles have been a significant part of human history for centuries. They make a lot of our daily jobs more simple and achievable, such as transportation. However, the impact of internal combustion engines in cars have been causing pollution and releasing chemicals that are permanently changing our environment. It is undeniable that society is addicted to fossil fuel and the only way to change it and keep the perks of technology is to switch to electric power. There are ways to generate electricity through nature, such as capturing energy from the sun, using windmill, and so on. The key is to figure out which renewable resource is most favored by people, so it’ll be easier to build the infrastructure with everyone’s support. Aside, from knowing the renewable resources, it is important for people to get in the habit of not needing fossil fuel. Obviously, a way for people to not use fossil fuel is to not need them in the first place. Switching to electric vehicles wil...
Flow of Paper:
ReplyDeleteI thought that your paper flowed well. When you add an in-text citation you should explain it a bit more and put information in the beginning of the sentence where you added the quote. Overall I thought your paper was well developed. You had a great balance of graphs with your paragraphs and everything is well explained.
Format / Language:
This paper was very formal. I thought that the length was perfect, but I did notice that you didn't have a long discussion. I would go back an add a bit more information to sum up your points. Your in-text citations looked good and you used a good variety of references. APA format was followed very well (use of headings, sub-headings, and headers).
Organization:
Your sections were very specific and followed the guidelines well. Great job!
Survey Itself:
I think you had great questions to ask. They were very specific which makes your information a lot more accurate and useful. It was a very interesting topic.
Improvements:
1. You had few spelling/grammar errors
2. Add more information in front of your in-text citations
3. Add more to your discussion it is quite short and needs a bit more information. (sum the paper up and explain your main points again
OVERALL GREAT PAPER!!
You had a really good introduction that concisely summed up the points of your research. You had a clear gap in knowledge, and your in text citations were correctly formatted. You could try maybe doing a little more of the reducing sentence size thing we learned in class, but overall great beginning. Your graphics were really good, but try putting italicized captions underneath them that label them and explain what data they are showing. There were a couple small grammar errors that are easy fixes. The one lacking area in your paper appears to be the discussion section. You need to more thoroughly review your points, and better explain the implications of your research. Other than that, this paper was well formatted, concise, and showed well researched data. Good job!
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